I decided to comment on your wall because I really like the design and layout of your blog. I like the background you used, it's not too busy or distracting from the importance of the text, however, what I like the most is the combination of colors that you used. The combination of the almost mustard yellow, the teal blue lettering, with the very well chosen grays and translucent blacks was a great combination!
Christian, I loved the layout of your storybook website! The sub-caption for the heading was absolutely perfect for the entire theme of your storybook! “What goes around comes around…” I love it! When I got to your introduction, I liked that you created a character actually called Karma and that you invented a whole persona for him as well. This will be so cool to use throughout your storybook because you can continue to develop his character and add interesting facts throughout the entire story. If I could give you one critique, I would just say a few of the sentences throughout the introduction are not really worded properly. For instance, the sentence in the last paragraph, “I can only imagine the juicy details that are being in the Kingdom,” should probably be changed to something like “I can only imagine the juicy details that are going to arise from the kingdom in the weeks to come” or something along those lines. Overall, you did a great job and I cannot wait to see what else you write for your storybook!
I laughed when I first opened your Storybook and saw it was on Tumblr. I knew in that instant it was going to be great. The sub-cation made me laugh and set the mood for the rest of the Storybook. I liked that Karma seemed to be like any other college kid typing away at his computer while on Tumblr. Also, your layout choice and colors are great. They keep everything with a nice clean feel that makes it easy to read. Oh, and the “about the author” in the sidebar is excellent. The profile picture is a nice touch. I think that this whole Storybook looks really great so far because you have paid attention to the details. This introduction has me really interested to see where you are going to take this in the following weeks. I will keep reading to see what is happening in Karma’s corner of the world.
Your cover page is very beautiful and comfortable. The top part has a very smooth transition to white theme. I do not know how you set your page layout, but I really like yours because I could see everything only with scrolling; it is very convenient. Font and color are very nice, which makes your page neat. The mood I feel is travelling; however, I do not know it would be time travels! This is very interesting. Your first sentence grab my attention not because a question but because the bonded first letter. I like this style; it reads like a magazine. The setting of time travel is very fascinating. Stepping onto a puddle but coming through it to another reality is an entirely new way of time travel. The sentence “It never came” is a good transition; it reminds this is the beginning point of your storybook. I would like to take a guess that this might be where your storybook ends as well.
I am looking forward to reading the merchant’s answer of when you are.
I was surprised to see that you were so far along on your storybook! I think it is interesting that you decided to use a totally different website for your project. I really like that idea, because you are blogging like you are actually Karma! Funny story, but Karma’s tumblr layout looks a lot like mine… I love how you tied modern slang into your posts. I absolutely adored the fact that Ganesha has a facebook! I’m excited to see if you add any more to this blog. I have only read your introduction and your Karma’s Promise piece, but I really enjoyed both so far. The only things I see that need fixing is perhaps proofreading your pieces, but other than that you did a fantastic job, Karma! P.S. I love that when you visit the tumblr account it seems like it is actually someone blogging, not just a storybook with a couple of tales, but an actual blog!
Hi Christian, I am commenting in regards to your project, storybook. First thing what I noticed when I got on to your page is the picture of the girl with a beautiful outfit. I am currently obsessed with that outfit. I liked your title for your storybook- Karma Tells All. It is such a brilliant title. I liked how you designed your storybook. You kept it simple but classy. Your choice of pictures are amazing. I had to stop and stare at them for a while. I enjoyed reading your introduction and story. I liked how you set up your introduction as from a point of view of Karma. You personified Karma, which made this storybook so much more interesting. In addition to personifying Karma, you made Karma a blogger, which relates to most of us in the class and made Karma a starter at blogging, which was very brilliant.
Honestly, This has to be the most creative idea so far. I never thought that anyone would make the idea of karma an actual character. The fact that made Karma naïve, invisible, and innocent works perfectly for the character too. At first when I jumped in your story at Blame the Good Guy it was a little confusing. I would edit your Authors note a little more. Just to make sure people now that Karma the idea now plays a character in the story. Your page looks great too. The colors are not distracting from the text and your story is easy to read. Your pictures also match what you are talking about and their links work. The idea of adding music went well too. I liked how you put it at the top instead of the bottom so that we read and listen at the same time. Overall I loved the tory and cant wait to read the next part.
Hi Christian! Your portfolio looks really good! I was drawn to the emerald green background. I think it fits in perfectly with the Indian theme and also with the pictures. I love love loved the pictures you included! They are so beautiful and having very nice bold colors. I thought it was clever to characterize karma as an actual person. This is definitely a project I will be coming back to every week. Great job!
Hello Christian! I like the whole idea behind your blog. You are going to tell the your story through the point of view of Karma. In this story Karma you make Karma a person instead of just treating it like an idea. I like how in the intro you give a lot of characteristics that someone would expect out of a person representing Karma. The comparison to Santa Claus was a good one.
In the first story of your storybook you tell us the exile of Rama in the view of Karma’s eyes. I like how you stick to the original plot for the most part but then have Karma comment on the parts he/she was involved in. So far your idea is simple and effective. – Story 1 comments
I thought the second story was very humorous. The popcorn is what caused the demon to be attracted to them. It seems that Karma needs to chill and quit interfering. – Story 2 comments
What’s up Chritian! I think there were some updates since last time we were in a group so I am going to comment again. Either way I have different stuff to say. I have go to say your page design is really cool. I looked through it and saw all of these current events. I wonder if a lot of the current events have to do with the topic of your storybook or its just because Karma is a newspaper. Either way it is a nice feature. I then went to check out your newest story. I believe I have commented on your stories before and your writing is still pretty good. I like how you have a little recap paragraph at the beginning of the storybook so that we can be refreshed on what has happened so far. The pictures that you use are really nice as well. Again, it is really cool that you are telling all of these stories from Karma’s point of view. Your story is really easy to follow. I look forward to your future updates.
I love the way you've designed your project. Creating a blog for Karma was such an interesting and creative choice. I have not seen anything like it so far! After reading your introduction and your first story, I'm really impressed. I was considering doing a storybook project on Karma, but decided against it because I wasn't sure if I could do it justice. You have written a fantastic introduction and story, though! The introduction gives a good idea of what to expect in your project and it is clear and descriptive. Also, I loved your first story. It's just a re-telling of a story that demonstrates how subtle and how complex Karma's role in everything can be. I like the way you ended the story with a hint about Karma fixing people's problems when they do not deserve them. That really lent to your characterization of Karma. You did an excellent job so far and I am looking forward to reading more. Good job!
I chose your Storybook as one of my choices to come back and look at for Week 11. I am glad I did! I was scrolling through the directory when I remembered how you formatted this on tumblr and how Karma is the author. It got even better from where I stopped last time! I really enjoyed the story about "Blame the Good Guy". Karma is always getting blamed. It makes me wonder if he is stereotyped. For instance, he did not think Queen Kaikeyi was going to request that Rama be banished for twelve years. He assumed she was going to just ask for a necklace or something. I like how you wrote it so Karma is going to try to fix Rama's situation. I am going to be back to see how Karma finishes out his tumblr and hopefully fixes his role in Rama's life! Keep up the good work.
This is the first time that I have visited your storybook and so I read the introduction and your first story, Karma's Promise. I'll start with how your storybook coverpage looks. I love it. It is so different than all the other ones that I have seen so its nice to have a little bit of a change. In your introduction, I really liked how you have your storybook set up as the blog of Karma. I think your introduction gives me a good idea of what your storybook is going to be about. Now onto my thoughts about your first story. I loved it. I like how Karma actually feels a little bad about the events that happened after requiring that the king gives his wife whatever she wants. Its obvious that Karma actually regrets that a little by saying that Karma was going to try to make it right. I really enjoyed your storybook.
Writing a blog through the eyes of Karma is an excellent idea! I really like the picture for your introduction? How did you make the image? It looks like a very professional poster. I also really enjoyed how you anthropomorphized Karma by describing likes, dislikes, and personality. In your first story, you say “The next part of this story…” Instead of saying this, just tell us the next part of the story. If you want a transition here, you can just say, “The root of the problem stretches to two years earlier…” You did a good job of telling the story of Rama’s banishment. However, since this storybook is centered on Karma, I think it would be useful to describe direct actions made by Karma. Karma makes King Dasharatha give Kaikeyi a boon, but Karma does not intervene in any other way. Since this story sets up the action with Rama, it might not be too much of an issue, but in future stories, I think it would be great to hear the cause and effect of things that Karma does.
Hi Christian. This is the first time I have visited your storybook, so I only got to read the introduction this week, but I think you have done a great job so far. I think using Karma as the narrator of the stories will make for a very interesting storybook. When I was contemplating between storybook and portfolio, I was thinking about making a storybook based on Karma somehow. Karma can be applied to essentially any story in the epics, which leaves you with endless possibilities. I also thought you had a very appealing point of view for the storybook. I liked the blog approach. Since we have been keeping up with our own blogs all semester, this is something everyone can relate to. Adding the references to social media and OU gave it a very modern and local aspect that will make it easy for all of the readers to relate to. Great job.
Hey Christian! So I am reading through your storybook for the first time and I’m surprised I haven’t read it before now because it’s actually really cool! I’m actually upset because now I have to read it all at once instead of story by story, which would have been awesome! Just by the title of your storybook I became interested, in addition to your title page which is nicely designed and has a lot of little things that make it really realistic looking!
Your stories were really great, I really like how you emphasized what Karma’s real role in the Ramayana was and what it could and couldn’t do in the world. I found it really interesting how you sort of integrated the modern world without really taking away from the classical stories. What really made me laugh was all the tweeting going on in the last story where Hanuman saves Sita. Great idea for this storybook!
Hi Christian! This is my first time visiting your storybook, although I have read some of your stories on your blog before. I have to say, I love the theme you chose. I love the title of your storybook. It definitely made me want to know more. I was wondering in my head what your introduction was going to be like before i even clicked on your link. The introduction was great, I think you did a great job of setting up the rest of your story book and keeping the reader interested. I loved your stories! I liked getting a deeper look into Karna's purpose in the classic epic, and getting a nice little twist to the stories. Incorporating some modern additions to the stories is always fun for me and making these ancient epics more relevant to us. I love how you were able to be both serious and funny. Great work!
I am checking out your storybook today for the first time, as I am actually in the Mythology and Folklore class. Right off the bat, I really liked the layout for your storybook. I think it was really creative of you to go about presenting your stories that way. I loved the personalized photo you created for the introduction. I think that goes a long way in demonstrating how much work you put into your project. Content-wise, I really enjoyed both your introduction and Karma’s Promise. It definitely had sort of a Gossip Girl feel to it, but you did a really good job of making the idea of karma stand out. “What goes around comes around” was such a good tag line for your project! I especially liked the line in your introduction where you say “The decisions you make will affect the rest of your life… no pressure.” It definitely served to hone in on the idea that the stories you were going to talk about revolved around karma.
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I decided to comment on your wall because I really like the design and layout of your blog. I like the background you used, it's not too busy or distracting from the importance of the text, however, what I like the most is the combination of colors that you used. The combination of the almost mustard yellow, the teal blue lettering, with the very well chosen grays and translucent blacks was a great combination!
ReplyDeleteChristian, I loved the layout of your storybook website! The sub-caption for the heading was absolutely perfect for the entire theme of your storybook! “What goes around comes around…” I love it! When I got to your introduction, I liked that you created a character actually called Karma and that you invented a whole persona for him as well. This will be so cool to use throughout your storybook because you can continue to develop his character and add interesting facts throughout the entire story. If I could give you one critique, I would just say a few of the sentences throughout the introduction are not really worded properly. For instance, the sentence in the last paragraph, “I can only imagine the juicy details that are being in the Kingdom,” should probably be changed to something like “I can only imagine the juicy details that are going to arise from the kingdom in the weeks to come” or something along those lines. Overall, you did a great job and I cannot wait to see what else you write for your storybook!
ReplyDeleteI laughed when I first opened your Storybook and saw it was on Tumblr. I knew in that instant it was going to be great. The sub-cation made me laugh and set the mood for the rest of the Storybook. I liked that Karma seemed to be like any other college kid typing away at his computer while on Tumblr. Also, your layout choice and colors are great. They keep everything with a nice clean feel that makes it easy to read. Oh, and the “about the author” in the sidebar is excellent. The profile picture is a nice touch. I think that this whole Storybook looks really great so far because you have paid attention to the details. This introduction has me really interested to see where you are going to take this in the following weeks. I will keep reading to see what is happening in Karma’s corner of the world.
ReplyDeleteYour cover page is very beautiful and comfortable. The top part has a very smooth transition to white theme. I do not know how you set your page layout, but I really like yours because I could see everything only with scrolling; it is very convenient. Font and color are very nice, which makes your page neat. The mood I feel is travelling; however, I do not know it would be time travels! This is very interesting.
ReplyDeleteYour first sentence grab my attention not because a question but because the bonded first letter. I like this style; it reads like a magazine. The setting of time travel is very fascinating. Stepping onto a puddle but coming through it to another reality is an entirely new way of time travel. The sentence “It never came” is a good transition; it reminds this is the beginning point of your storybook. I would like to take a guess that this might be where your storybook ends as well.
I am looking forward to reading the merchant’s answer of when you are.
I was surprised to see that you were so far along on your storybook! I think it is interesting that you decided to use a totally different website for your project. I really like that idea, because you are blogging like you are actually Karma! Funny story, but Karma’s tumblr layout looks a lot like mine… I love how you tied modern slang into your posts. I absolutely adored the fact that Ganesha has a facebook! I’m excited to see if you add any more to this blog. I have only read your introduction and your Karma’s Promise piece, but I really enjoyed both so far. The only things I see that need fixing is perhaps proofreading your pieces, but other than that you did a fantastic job, Karma! P.S. I love that when you visit the tumblr account it seems like it is actually someone blogging, not just a storybook with a couple of tales, but an actual blog!
ReplyDeleteHi Christian,
ReplyDeleteI am commenting in regards to your project, storybook. First thing what I noticed when I got on to your page is the picture of the girl with a beautiful outfit. I am currently obsessed with that outfit. I liked your title for your storybook- Karma Tells All. It is such a brilliant title. I liked how you designed your storybook. You kept it simple but classy. Your choice of pictures are amazing. I had to stop and stare at them for a while. I enjoyed reading your introduction and story. I liked how you set up your introduction as from a point of view of Karma. You personified Karma, which made this storybook so much more interesting. In addition to personifying Karma, you made Karma a blogger, which relates to most of us in the class and made Karma a starter at blogging, which was very brilliant.
Honestly, This has to be the most creative idea so far. I never thought that anyone would make the idea of karma an actual character. The fact that made Karma naïve, invisible, and innocent works perfectly for the character too. At first when I jumped in your story at Blame the Good Guy it was a little confusing. I would edit your Authors note a little more. Just to make sure people now that Karma the idea now plays a character in the story. Your page looks great too. The colors are not distracting from the text and your story is easy to read. Your pictures also match what you are talking about and their links work. The idea of adding music went well too. I liked how you put it at the top instead of the bottom so that we read and listen at the same time. Overall I loved the tory and cant wait to read the next part.
ReplyDeleteHi Christian! Your portfolio looks really good! I was drawn to the emerald green background. I think it fits in perfectly with the Indian theme and also with the pictures. I love love loved the pictures you included! They are so beautiful and having very nice bold colors. I thought it was clever to characterize karma as an actual person. This is definitely a project I will be coming back to every week. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHello Christian! I like the whole idea behind your blog. You are going to tell the your story through the point of view of Karma. In this story Karma you make Karma a person instead of just treating it like an idea. I like how in the intro you give a lot of characteristics that someone would expect out of a person representing Karma. The comparison to Santa Claus was a good one.
ReplyDeleteIn the first story of your storybook you tell us the exile of Rama in the view of Karma’s eyes. I like how you stick to the original plot for the most part but then have Karma comment on the parts he/she was involved in. So far your idea is simple and effective. – Story 1 comments
I thought the second story was very humorous. The popcorn is what caused the demon to be attracted to them. It seems that Karma needs to chill and quit interfering. – Story 2 comments
What’s up Chritian! I think there were some updates since last time we were in a group so I am going to comment again. Either way I have different stuff to say. I have go to say your page design is really cool. I looked through it and saw all of these current events. I wonder if a lot of the current events have to do with the topic of your storybook or its just because Karma is a newspaper. Either way it is a nice feature. I then went to check out your newest story. I believe I have commented on your stories before and your writing is still pretty good. I like how you have a little recap paragraph at the beginning of the storybook so that we can be refreshed on what has happened so far. The pictures that you use are really nice as well. Again, it is really cool that you are telling all of these stories from Karma’s point of view. Your story is really easy to follow. I look forward to your future updates.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you've designed your project. Creating a blog for Karma was such an interesting and creative choice. I have not seen anything like it so far! After reading your introduction and your first story, I'm really impressed. I was considering doing a storybook project on Karma, but decided against it because I wasn't sure if I could do it justice. You have written a fantastic introduction and story, though! The introduction gives a good idea of what to expect in your project and it is clear and descriptive. Also, I loved your first story. It's just a re-telling of a story that demonstrates how subtle and how complex Karma's role in everything can be. I like the way you ended the story with a hint about Karma fixing people's problems when they do not deserve them. That really lent to your characterization of Karma. You did an excellent job so far and I am looking forward to reading more. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI chose your Storybook as one of my choices to come back and look at for Week 11. I am glad I did! I was scrolling through the directory when I remembered how you formatted this on tumblr and how Karma is the author. It got even better from where I stopped last time! I really enjoyed the story about "Blame the Good Guy". Karma is always getting blamed. It makes me wonder if he is stereotyped. For instance, he did not think Queen Kaikeyi was going to request that Rama be banished for twelve years. He assumed she was going to just ask for a necklace or something. I like how you wrote it so Karma is going to try to fix Rama's situation. I am going to be back to see how Karma finishes out his tumblr and hopefully fixes his role in Rama's life! Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteThis is the first time that I have visited your storybook and so I read the introduction and your first story, Karma's Promise. I'll start with how your storybook coverpage looks. I love it. It is so different than all the other ones that I have seen so its nice to have a little bit of a change. In your introduction, I really liked how you have your storybook set up as the blog of Karma. I think your introduction gives me a good idea of what your storybook is going to be about. Now onto my thoughts about your first story. I loved it. I like how Karma actually feels a little bad about the events that happened after requiring that the king gives his wife whatever she wants. Its obvious that Karma actually regrets that a little by saying that Karma was going to try to make it right. I really enjoyed your storybook.
ReplyDeleteWriting a blog through the eyes of Karma is an excellent idea! I really like the picture for your introduction? How did you make the image? It looks like a very professional poster. I also really enjoyed how you anthropomorphized Karma by describing likes, dislikes, and personality. In your first story, you say “The next part of this story…” Instead of saying this, just tell us the next part of the story. If you want a transition here, you can just say, “The root of the problem stretches to two years earlier…” You did a good job of telling the story of Rama’s banishment. However, since this storybook is centered on Karma, I think it would be useful to describe direct actions made by Karma. Karma makes King Dasharatha give Kaikeyi a boon, but Karma does not intervene in any other way. Since this story sets up the action with Rama, it might not be too much of an issue, but in future stories, I think it would be great to hear the cause and effect of things that Karma does.
ReplyDeleteHi Christian. This is the first time I have visited your storybook, so I only got to read the introduction this week, but I think you have done a great job so far. I think using Karma as the narrator of the stories will make for a very interesting storybook. When I was contemplating between storybook and portfolio, I was thinking about making a storybook based on Karma somehow. Karma can be applied to essentially any story in the epics, which leaves you with endless possibilities. I also thought you had a very appealing point of view for the storybook. I liked the blog approach. Since we have been keeping up with our own blogs all semester, this is something everyone can relate to. Adding the references to social media and OU gave it a very modern and local aspect that will make it easy for all of the readers to relate to. Great job.
ReplyDeleteHey Christian!
ReplyDeleteSo I am reading through your storybook for the first time and I’m surprised I haven’t read it before now because it’s actually really cool! I’m actually upset because now I have to read it all at once instead of story by story, which would have been awesome! Just by the title of your storybook I became interested, in addition to your title page which is nicely designed and has a lot of little things that make it really realistic looking!
Your stories were really great, I really like how you emphasized what Karma’s real role in the Ramayana was and what it could and couldn’t do in the world. I found it really interesting how you sort of integrated the modern world without really taking away from the classical stories. What really made me laugh was all the tweeting going on in the last story where Hanuman saves Sita. Great idea for this storybook!
Hi Christian! This is my first time visiting your storybook, although I have read some of your stories on your blog before. I have to say, I love the theme you chose. I love the title of your storybook. It definitely made me want to know more. I was wondering in my head what your introduction was going to be like before i even clicked on your link. The introduction was great, I think you did a great job of setting up the rest of your story book and keeping the reader interested. I loved your stories! I liked getting a deeper look into Karna's purpose in the classic epic, and getting a nice little twist to the stories. Incorporating some modern additions to the stories is always fun for me and making these ancient epics more relevant to us. I love how you were able to be both serious and funny. Great work!
ReplyDeleteHi, Christian!
ReplyDeleteI am checking out your storybook today for the first time, as I am actually in the Mythology and Folklore class. Right off the bat, I really liked the layout for your storybook. I think it was really creative of you to go about presenting your stories that way. I loved the personalized photo you created for the introduction. I think that goes a long way in demonstrating how much work you put into your project.
Content-wise, I really enjoyed both your introduction and Karma’s Promise. It definitely had sort of a Gossip Girl feel to it, but you did a really good job of making the idea of karma stand out. “What goes around comes around” was such a good tag line for your project! I especially liked the line in your introduction where you say “The decisions you make will affect the rest of your life… no pressure.” It definitely served to hone in on the idea that the stories you were going to talk about revolved around karma.